Storytelling Discussion
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
Yay! I was going for alien spirit thought feeling, and the play idea at beginning and end is good, but I really wanted to start with that plaintive line, "Where is my child?" I thought it set an uncertain tone that would add to the alien-ness.
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
It's an excellent little story, thank you
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"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
- Artemisia
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
So...as I was thinking...I love working off of pictures for stories, and I'll get two up shortly, but here beith the next prompt:
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"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
Gender-bent burlesque Hamlet?
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politics: n. pl. from the Grk polis, meaning many, and the OE ticia, meaning blood sucking insects.
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
Hey, if you want to write that scene- go for it.
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"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
My apologies for not keeping up on the writing prompts. I've been editing my first book, trying to get it ready for publishing as an e-book (particularly since I've installed a major upgrade of the e-book editing software I use on my newer Windows 7 machine instead of the old Windows XP machine I've been using). I still have to get the illustrations or at least the cover done for it and work on some sort of low-budget marketing plan more developed than the nebulous idea of running ads on some of the webcomics I think potential readers would follow. I've made a lot of progress on it; I've finished yet another complete readthrough, but I'm also reading it to a friend over Skype: it is reading it aloud to another person—not just to myself—where the glitches really jump off the pages. It forces me to read every word I actually wrote, not what I thought I wrote. Someone who will sit and listen to me read chapter after chapter is, for me, a writer's greatest treasure. It's the best way I know of catching errors no mere spellchecking program would ever find. Sometimes I wish I was reading it to someone who wasn't a friend, though—I feel that I'm not getting the type of criticism it actually needs. I think she genuinely likes it and just isn't saying it to be nice but I'm sure there is room for improvement. (There always is.)
I've even gotten work done on the second book, making more progress on it in the past week than I've made in almost a year.
Anyhow, I have an idea for combining the two of the last three prompts into a single one that I hope to post soon. In the writing group I'm in that meets on Mondays, I do that a lot because we draw two prompts from the bowl, and each of us can select which one he or she actually writes about, but I commonly combine both into a single one for the added challenge. Unfortunately nothing has come immediately to mind on the new one above, aside from the obvious Hamlet reference, which, I see, is already being done.
I've even gotten work done on the second book, making more progress on it in the past week than I've made in almost a year.
Anyhow, I have an idea for combining the two of the last three prompts into a single one that I hope to post soon. In the writing group I'm in that meets on Mondays, I do that a lot because we draw two prompts from the bowl, and each of us can select which one he or she actually writes about, but I commonly combine both into a single one for the added challenge. Unfortunately nothing has come immediately to mind on the new one above, aside from the obvious Hamlet reference, which, I see, is already being done.
I think outside the tesseract.
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
That sounds interesting.
I'm actually thinking of a couple of different things for it, but neither is fleshing itself out in my head yet.
I'm actually thinking of a couple of different things for it, but neither is fleshing itself out in my head yet.
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That one's easy: it's because it sounds disgusting. Society's got nothing to do with that. ~Gotoh
Geez. Why are adults so pigheaded? ~Palom
How do you prove that we exist? Maybe we don't exist... ~Vivi Orunitia
The only dependable thing about the future is uncertainty. ~Amarant Coral
ADD is a double edged sword. Also the handle is a blade.
That one's easy: it's because it sounds disgusting. Society's got nothing to do with that. ~Gotoh
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
No worries, Retarius, go ahead with that if you like because a writer, I am not.
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politics: n. pl. from the Grk polis, meaning many, and the OE ticia, meaning blood sucking insects.
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
I meant the books. It sounds fun
You don't need a reason to help people. ~Zidane Tribal
Geez. Why are adults so pigheaded? ~Palom
How do you prove that we exist? Maybe we don't exist... ~Vivi Orunitia
The only dependable thing about the future is uncertainty. ~Amarant Coral
ADD is a double edged sword. Also the handle is a blade.
That one's easy: it's because it sounds disgusting. Society's got nothing to do with that. ~Gotoh
Geez. Why are adults so pigheaded? ~Palom
How do you prove that we exist? Maybe we don't exist... ~Vivi Orunitia
The only dependable thing about the future is uncertainty. ~Amarant Coral
ADD is a double edged sword. Also the handle is a blade.
That one's easy: it's because it sounds disgusting. Society's got nothing to do with that. ~Gotoh
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
It's pretty good except when you get stuck on a bit of dialog for months at a time.
I think outside the tesseract.
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
Retarius, it's alright
I've been doing my best, but things get to me easily, and this tends to be one of the things that is difficult for me to keep up with when I'm depressed. Still, thank you and I look forward to your stories. and I'm glad that your novel is coming along so well
I've been doing my best, but things get to me easily, and this tends to be one of the things that is difficult for me to keep up with when I'm depressed. Still, thank you and I look forward to your stories. and I'm glad that your novel is coming along so well
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"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
There are several things I don't like about this story, one of which is that I had trouble moving it forward and still saying everything that needed to be said without getting to be grotesquely long for this purpose. Also, I wanted to try something different, and I don't really think I hit the mark I was going for. So, yeah, not much of a horror girl myself, but it was interesting.
You don't need a reason to help people. ~Zidane Tribal
Geez. Why are adults so pigheaded? ~Palom
How do you prove that we exist? Maybe we don't exist... ~Vivi Orunitia
The only dependable thing about the future is uncertainty. ~Amarant Coral
ADD is a double edged sword. Also the handle is a blade.
That one's easy: it's because it sounds disgusting. Society's got nothing to do with that. ~Gotoh
Geez. Why are adults so pigheaded? ~Palom
How do you prove that we exist? Maybe we don't exist... ~Vivi Orunitia
The only dependable thing about the future is uncertainty. ~Amarant Coral
ADD is a double edged sword. Also the handle is a blade.
That one's easy: it's because it sounds disgusting. Society's got nothing to do with that. ~Gotoh
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
Artemisia, I'm going to apologize. I would have thought being on vacation would be better for possibly writing. And I'm actually feeling a bit of the opposite, currently. Perhaps it's because I'm living alone for the first time during a vacation, with virtually no human interaction unless I have to go to the store for something. I've been looking at your image prompt... and I'm simply not getting anything. Then I've tried to shift gears, try to work on some other writing that I've been wanting to attempt... and I'm still drawing a blank.
Trust me, this has been very unexpected - and unwelcome. Hopefully, it passes soon.
Trust me, this has been very unexpected - and unwelcome. Hopefully, it passes soon.
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Re: Storytelling Discussion
DnE, I understand. Sometimes it's hard to come up with things, and it all depends on what drives you to write. If you are someone who writes because of your interactions with others, then it makes sense that you're not feeling it right now.
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"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"
"I'm going to do what I do best...lecture her."- Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic)
"Hello, I'm a lizard woman from the dawn of time, and this is my wife." - Madam Vastra (Doctor Who "The Snowmen")
"There's no point in being grown up if you can't be childish sometimes." The 4th Doctor Doctor Who "Robot"